a 30% elderly population?

raymondaliasapollyon

Senior Member
Chinese
Hi,

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

1. Tokyo is a city with an approximately 30% elderly population.
2. Tokyo is a city with an elderly population of approximately 30%.

I'd appreciate your help.
 
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  • DonnyB

    Sixties Mod
    English UK Southern Standard English
    I'm not an expert on population statistics, but those both sound a little bit odd to me.

    I think I'd have said: "Tokyo is a city with a population of whom approximately 30% are elderly". :)
     

    Andygc

    Senior Member
    British English
    I agree with DonnyB (but "odd", not "a little odd"). But what does "elderly" mean? Over 65, 70, 75, 80 ... ?
     
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