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azz

Senior Member
armenian
Can one say
a. Our dishonest manager says that a bad soccer player is the player who touches the ball with his hand and everybody notices, and a good player is one who touches the ball and nobody sees it.

b. Our dishonest manager says that a bad soccer player is the player who fouls and everybody notices, and a good player is one who fouls and nobody notices.

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The sentences are mine.

In soccer, no player other than the goalie has the right to touch the ball with their hands (handle the ball).

The defining clauses do sound strange to me. The part after 'and' doesn't seem correct. But I think people might say this kind of thing.

Many thanks.
 
  • Thomas Tompion

    Senior Member
    English - England
    I don't think there is anything incorrect about these sentences, Azz.

    Inevitably I think the parallelisms could be more effectively handled, but you weren't asking about that.
     
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