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windyvalley

Senior Member
Chinese
Hi,

"The global competitiveness rankings are drawn from a combination of publicly available hard data and the results of a comprehensive annual survey conducted by the WEF among 125 economies worldwide."

This is from a book.
I am wondering if the bold parts are necessary in this sentense,as I think they seem redundant and the sentence works fine without them.

The global competitiveness rankings are drawn from publicly available hard data and a comprehensive annual survey conducted by the WEF among 125 economies worldwide.

What do you think? Which one would you prefer to use?

Thanks!

Windy
 
  • Joelline

    Senior Member
    American English
    I agree; however, if you wanted to emphasize the connection between these two factors, you could add two words (needed to maintain parallelism):

    The global competitiveness rankings are drawn both from publicly available hard data and from a comprehensive annual survey conducted by the WEF among 125 economies worldwide.
     

    BantyMom

    Senior Member
    English - USA
    I would tweak that just a bit, moving the word both:


    The global competitiveness rankings are drawn from both publicly available hard data and a comprehensive annual survey conducted by the WEF among 125 economies worldwide.
     
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