a deep voice growled from the opposite corner

SophieLOL

Banned
Spanish
Hi, i have a question.
In this text;

"So, you were peacefully sleeping in your bedroom, when suddenly a shadow slipped through the door... And as it began approaching you, a deep voice growled from the opposite corner; "what the hell do you think you're doing..??"

Do you understand that there were 3 people in one room, one sleeping, the other entering through the door, and the 3rd one standing in the opposite corner? Or is it a little bit confusing? if so, how can i edit it?
Thanks in advance.
 
  • Valeria Mesalina

    Senior Member
    Spanish, Spain
    No.

    What I understand is that there is one person inside the room, a shadow is entering the room and a voice is growling somewhere around the corner.

    A shadow is a shadow: ghost, vampire, ghoul, poltergeist, alien. And a voice is just a voice: cell phone, recording machine, telly, microphone.
     
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