a finding that flies in the face of a Statistics Canada report

Discussion in 'English Only' started by Ume, Aug 22, 2006.

  1. http://www.canada.com/topics/bodyandhealth/story.html?id=ed336bd4-6b69-4d74-a5fd-8c23600031b5&k=8560085600
    Moreover, the survey said only nine per cent considered their offspring overweight, a finding that flies in the face of a Statistics Canada report that 26 per cent of children under age 18 are overweight or obese.
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    I don't believe that this sentence is grammatical. I would say, "Moreover, the survey said only nine per cent considered their offspring overweight. However, according to a Statistics Canada report, 26 per cent of children under age 18 are overweight or obese." How about you?
     
  2. TrentinaNE

    TrentinaNE Senior Member

    USA
    English (American)
    Although the original sentence is a bit complex, it is not grammatically incorrect. Some might consider your revision, however, to be a stylistic improvement, once you move the "however." ;)

    Elisabetta
     

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