A guiding star

bmo

Senior Member
Taiwan
1. You are always like a bright star, guiding me to the right direction.

2. You are like the shining star in every dark night, guiding me in the right track.

3. You are like a star, guiding me in the right direction.

Do you see any grammatical errors in these, and what is the native's version? Which of the above is closest?

Thanks a lot.

bmo
 
  • Siberia

    Senior Member
    UK-Wales - English
    1. You are always like a bright star, guiding me in the right direction.

    2. You are like a/the shining star on every dark night, guiding me on the right track.

    3. You are like a star, guiding me in the right direction.

    Do you see any grammatical errors in these, and what is the native's version? Which of the above is closest?

    Thanks a lot.

    bmo
    The closest to what? All three sentences are quite clear with a minor error.
     

    AngelEyes

    Senior Member
    English - United States
    1. You are always like a bright star, guiding me to the right direction.

    2. You are like the shining star in every dark night, guiding me in the right track.

    3. You are like a star, guiding me in the right direction.

    Do you see any grammatical errors in these, and what is the native's version? Which of the above is closest?

    Thanks a lot.

    bmo
    Can you combine elements of each of them?


    You are like a bright, shining star lighting my path through every dark night.

    Or

    You are like a bright, shining star guiding my way through every dark night.



    These flow smoothly and work well if you can change the words around to create a more poetic effect.


    AngelEyes
     
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