a healthy balance between risk-taking and passion and security and responsibility [commas needed?]

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dakto123

New Member
Slovak
I'd like someone to help me with a bit of a dilemma. There is this sentence:

"Great relationships are based on achieving a healthy balance between risk-taking and passion and security and responsibility."

I suppose that the author's intention was to express contrast between the first two (risk-taking and passion) and the second two (security and responsibility).
Should there be commas somewhere in between the adjectives or not?

Thanks in advance. :)
 
  • Uncle Jack

    Senior Member
    British English
    Should there be commas somewhere in between the adjectives or not?
    It would be a lot easier to read if there was one, before the second "and". However there is usually no comma in the the expression "between A and B", and I imagine this was the thought in the writer's mind.
     

    elroy

    Imperfect Mod
    US English, Palestinian Arabic bilingual
    You could do something like

    between a spirit of risk-taking and passion and a focus on security and responsibility
     
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