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quietdandelion

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Formosa/Chinese
My student wrote:
However, such extraordinary job is appealing to everybody and becomes a hot profession. It requires excellent academic performances. So, the one who did his best could realize this dream. I have to work hard to fulfill it. Although it is very hard but I'll never give up and keep working on until I make it come true.

My suggestion:
1.) has become a popular profession.
2.) only those who do their best could realize this dream.
3.) studying/working hard


Correct me if there is anything wrong. Thanks.
 
  • Joelline

    Senior Member
    American English
    My student wrote:
    However, such an extraordinary job is appealing to everybody and becomes a hot profession. It requires excellent academic performances. So, the one who did his best could realize this dream. I have to work hard to fulfill it. Although it is very hard but I'll never give up and keep working on until I make it come true.

    My suggestion:
    1.) has become a popular profession. :tick:
    2.) only those who do their best could realize this dream. :cross: There is no reason not to use the present tense here: only those who do their best CAN realize this dream.

    3.) studying/working hard :tick:

    Correct me if there is anything wrong. Thanks.
    Finally, in the US, it would be more common to say: "It requires excellent academic grades or marks or credentials.
     

    cycloneviv

    Senior Member
    English - Australia
    For the last sentence, I lean towards this suggestion:

    "Although it is very hard, I'll never give up and will keep on working until I make it come true."

    You could also simply say "and will keep working until I make it come true", dropping "on" altogether.
     

    nichec

    Senior Member
    Chinese(Taiwan)/English(AE)
    My student wrote:
    However, such extraordinary job is appealing to everybody and becomes a hot profession. It requires excellent academic performances. So, the one who did his best could realize this dream. I have to work hard to fulfill it. Although it is very hard but I'll never give up and keep working on until I make it come true.

    My suggestion:
    1.) has become a popular profession.
    2.) only those who do their best could realize this dream.
    3.) studying/working hard


    Correct me if there is anything wrong. Thanks.
    I wonder, if the student meant "hot" as in high social statue, or "hot" as in popular, but I suppose a profession has to be respected to be popular (normally, I mean :rolleyes:)

    So, my suggestion would be "promising".
     
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