a ladle of steel – the very essence of metal. [use dash "–"]

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melody_wxf

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Hi, I has some confusions with the use of dash "-" when writting a short story in English.

Here are two most confusing sentences:

1. When the tapping was completed, what came out was less than a ladle ofmolten steel the very essence of metal.

Question: Can I use dash in this sentence? Or do I have to put it this way: "....what came out was less than a ladle of molten steel, which was the very essence of metal."
I feel the sentence with a dash is better in dramatic effect.

2. Don’t hang onto that girl – she is not the onlyfish in the sea.
Can I link two sentences by a dash? If I can, should "she" be capitalized?

Thanks a lot.
 
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