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quietdandelion

Banned
Formosa/Chinese
For Buteo, to build and fly kites has become a lifelong passion of his.
for Buteo, to make and fly kites has become his lifelong passion.



Which of the above two sounds right, and why (in a few words)? Thanks.
 
  • chauncy

    Member
    English; Australia
    I think 'build' and 'make' are both correct here. But I would say:

    'For Buteo, to build (make) and fly kites has become a lifelong passion.'

    There is no need to say 'his' or 'of his' since you are also saying 'For Buteo'.
     

    Prometo

    Senior Member
    USA English
    These both are "almost acceptable" in spoken language. They might sound a bit foreign.

    I would prefer to say:

    Building (or, preferably, making) and flying kites has become (became is better, if applicable) Buteo's lifelong passion.

    Buteo's lifelong passion is making and flying kites.

    For Buteo, a lifelong passion is (the) making and flying (of) kites.

    For Buteo, to build (or make) and fly kites has become a lifelong passion.

    Mix and match :)
     

    chauncy

    Member
    English; Australia
    Oh yes, my reply wasn't definitive. But a few comments:

    Whether you say 'has become' or 'became' depends on what you are trying to say. They are both correct English but have different meanings.

    If I had to choose between 'build' and 'make' I would choose 'build'. But really, there is very little difference here. (I am talking about kites. You might say 'make a cake' but you wouldn't say 'build a cake'.)

    You suggested:

    'Buteo's lifelong passion is making and flying kites.'

    That sentence means that Buteo has only one passion, whereas the other sentences leave open the possibility that he has other passions. :)
     
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