a major step

Discussion in 'English Only' started by hly2004, Jan 27, 2007.

  1. hly2004 Banned

    chinese
    Hi, everyone:

    Los Angeles and Chicago submitted detailed plans for the 2016 Summer Olympics to the U.S. Olympic Committee on Monday, a major step in the process to decide which city will bid for the games next year.

    I don't feel this sentence gramatically correct, but I don't know how to correct it. Could you help me please?

    Best wishes.
     
  2. pieanne

    pieanne Senior Member

    Nice Hinterland
    Belgium/French
    I don't think there's anything wrong with the sentence, apart from perhaps the punctuation.

    The fact that LA & C submitted detailed plans was/is a major step in the process etc...
     
  3. hly2004 Banned

    chinese
    Thanks:)
    I also think the punctuation is a minor error.

    Best wishes.
     
  4. panjandrum

    panjandrum Occasional Moderator

    Belfast, Ireland
    English-Ireland (top end)
    I think the sentence is OK.
    What is worrying you about it?

    I might have written it as two sentences:
    Los Angeles and Chicago submitted detailed plans for the 2016 Summer Olympics to the U.S. Olympic Committee on Monday. This is a major step in the process to decide which city will bid for the games next year.
     
  5. hly2004 Banned

    chinese
    I see, thank you:)
     
  6. Granny Grammar Senior Member

    English US
    Hi hly,

    The two sentences that panjandrum suggests are the best way to communicate your idea.

    In your original sentence, "major step" refers to "Monday."

    With the proposed change, "major step" in the second sentence would refer to the entire idea presented in the first sentence.
     
  7. JamesM

    JamesM Senior Member

    I agree that Panjandrum's suggestion is very clear, but I disagree that "major step" refers to Monday in the original. Everything after "detailed plans" are all prepositional phrases. The sentence boils down to:

    Los Angeles and Chicago submitted detailed plans, a major step in the process to decide which city will bid for the games next year.

    "a major step" describes the act of submitting detailed plans.
     
  8. hly2004 Banned

    chinese
    Thank you all:)
     

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