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Astrid Choi

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China - Mandarin & Cantonese
My friend is writing her personal statement for an exchange programme and she starts it with this:







"As my goal is to be engaged in global strategies consulting for transnational enterprises, ..."

I do not think she is using the word "engage" properly... but I have no idea about its proper use, either.

Is it OK to say like "...my goal is to engage global strategies consulting..."?
Or it should be like "...my goal is to be engaged as a global strategy consultant in transnational enterprises..."?
Also I personally consider the word "global" here a bit redundant. Anyone agree?


Really need help, thanks in advance!
 
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