After Earlier This Morning When ....

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HSS

Senior Member
Standard Japanese, Sendaian Japanese
The following is a caption from today's Yahoo News. Is the part 'after earlier this morning when ...' a common construct? To me 'after he was arrested ... earlier this morning in connection with the murder ...' sounds a lot better.



Security escorts Raymond Clark III for arraignment at the New Haven Superior Court after earlier this morning when he was arrested at a Super 8 Motel in connection with the murder of Yale University graduate student Annie Le. Doesn't it?
 
  • sdgraham

    Senior Member
    USA English
    Whoever wrote the caption should be neutralized. The construction is abysmal.

    An addition, "security" is an abstraction, not a person.

    Try "Raymond Clark III is escorted to the New Haven Superior Court after he was arrested this morning in connection with the murder of Yale University graduate student Annie Le."

    (The Super 8 motel reference borders on the irrelevant)

    Note that photographers are often the ones who write captions. Many are not known for their textual editing skills.
     
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