; and Jack

wizard8451

Senior Member
Mexico, Spanish
Can somebody tell me which version is correct? Thanks.

Dayton is blond, handsome; and Jack, brunette, is appealing in a dry sort of way.

Dayton is blond, handsome, and Jack, brunette, is appealing in a dry sort of way.
 
  • panjandrum

    Lapsed Moderator
    English-Ireland (top end)
    Dayton is blond, handsome; and Jack, brunette, is appealing in a dry sort of way.

    Dayton is blond, handsome, and Jack, brunette, is appealing in a dry sort of way.
    If you are using a semicolon, you should not use a conjunction as well (Source).

    Your sentence structure is inconsistent.
    The first part is of the form:
    Name is <list of attributes>;
    The second part is of the form:
    Name, <attribute>, is <attribute>.

    Apart from the missing and in the first part (which is probably OK in some contexts), the change of structure confuses (this) reader. So I suggest one of these:

    Dayton is blond and handsome; Jack is brunette, and is appealing in a dry sort of way.
    Dayton is blond and handsome; Jack is brunette and appealing, in a dry sort of way.
    Dayton, blond, is handsome; Jack, brunette, is appealing in a dry sort of way.

    I prefer the first of these.
     
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