army vs. business

sun 94

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I am trying to compare similarites army and business organization and I wonder if the underlined words are ok.

I found out that army is like a business organization. For example, if employee neglect his/her duties, the business organization may no longer exist. . Likewise if each soldier in army negelct his/her duties, the army cannot exist.
 
  • filleanglaise

    Senior Member
    You need 'the' army here. Because your second sentence is an 'if' ie dependent on something else happening it would be better to say ;

    ...if an employee neglected his duties; the BO would no longer exist. Likewise if each soldier in the army neglected his duties, the army would not exist.

    I think perhaps changing 'likewise' maybe better but I'm sorry I can't think of anything at the moment!

    :)
     
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