as a conductor, pianist, and commentator

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jjshin

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korean
The well-known conductor and pianist Kim Dae-jin had led this class as not only a conductor, pianist, but also commentator in the last five years, which was a huge hit.

My intention is
He played triple role.
This class was successful.
(Mr.Kim is a conductor and pianist)

Would you think my sentence is good?



 
  • Harry Batt

    Senior Member
    USA English
    The well-known conductor and pianist Kim Dae-jin had led this class as not only a conductor and pianist, but also as commentator [in] during the last five years, which role was a huge hit.

    Your sentence, as written, does convey the information that you want the reader to understand. I would prefer the use of during for in. During means the entire span of five years whereas in could mean less than five. I think you wanted to convey the entire five years. I would identify the activity, a role, that wa a huge hit unless you want the reader to ponder whether the hit was all three roles rather than the additional role.
     
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