"...attractiveness of the organization..."

Pizzelle

Senior Member
English
According to the case, a diverse workforce contributes to the organization’s quality decisions and attractiveness of the organization that further augment its success.
Is the sentence clear and concise? Do you understand the point I am trying to get across?
 
  • Cagey

    post mod (English Only / Latin)
    English - US
    Will you please tell us what specific part you are worried about? Also, what is the point you are trying to get across? Could you tell us in other words?

    We can answer specific questions about language, but we don't check over your work for errors. We call that proofreading and proofreading is not permitted.

    Also, when you give us a starting point for our thinking, you will get better answers.

    See this: Proofreading/ Text for Correction.
     
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