Before investigations were performed...

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shiningstar

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turkish
Hi,

"In this project, investigations carried out with ZnAl15 materials for joining zinc coated steel sheets of TI094 WWP+E1(thickness 1,1 mm). Before investigations were performed by resistance spot soldering and show that using low temperature melting materials leads to a lower damaging of the zinc coating."

This passage is from a research report. Second sentence doesn't seem make sense as it begins with "Before". I need your opinions.
 
  • Copyright

    Senior Member
    American English
    Here's a guess: put a comma after "Before."

    Before, investigations were performed by resistance spot soldering... (second sentence)
    Now, they are carried out with ZnAl15 materials... (first sentence)

    See if that makes sense.
     

    shiningstar

    Senior Member
    turkish
    Before, investigations were performed by resistance spot soldering and show that using low temperature melting materials leads to a lower damaging of the zinc coating. (new technique)

    I tried to highlight the incongruence here. Even when I used comma, it doesn't make sense.
     

    shawnee

    Senior Member
    English - Australian
    Hi,

    "In this project, investigations were carried out with ZnAl15 materials for joining zinc coated steel sheets of TI094 WWP+E1(thickness 1,1 mm). Previously investigations had been performed by resistance spot soldering showing that the use of low temperature melting materials leads to a lower damaging of the zinc coating."

    This passage is from a research report. Second sentence doesn't seem make sense as it begins with "Before". I need your opinions.
     
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    Copyright

    Senior Member
    American English
    Before, investigations were performed by resistance spot soldering, which showed that using low-temperature melting materials results in less damage to the zinc coating.
     

    entangledbank

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    English - South-East England
    shawnee's analysis seems correct, and the original sentences are both in error. Minimally, the first needs 'were' added, while the second needs a comma and the change of tense to 'showed'. But 'before' without a complement here is rather colloquial: 'previously' is much better for such a report.

    Oh yes, and 'a lower damaging' is wrong too. (I just noticed Copyright's reply above.)
     
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