combine my passion for both words and visual arts

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Lolaaimelechocolat

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french
Hi there!

I am writing a cover letter in English, and this sentence sounds somewhat awkward to me:

"While these internships gave me valuable experience in a wide range of roles, they made me realize that publishing and editing are the fields I wish to focus on, as they combine my passion for both words and visual arts."

It's the end that's bothering me. Maybe should I say "as they combine both my passions for words and visual arts"?
 
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