comma btw subject and verb: and where the members..., are rewarded

[susanna76]

Hi there,

I was looking online at a T-shirt design that gives a made-up definition for ineptocracy (does the word even exist? I suspect not). It goes like this:
"A system of government where the least capable to lead are elected by the least capable of producing, and where the members of society least likely to sustain themselves or succeed, are rewarded with goods and services paid for by the confiscated wealth of a diminishing number of producers."

As you can see, there's a comma between subject phrase and predicate in there, before "are rewarded." Is that OK? Is it OK for it to be there?

Thank you!

 

[entangledbank]

It is legitimately used for this purpose sometimes. But as a rule of thumb, it should only be so used if the subject is so long that it shouldn't have been written like that in the first place.

 

[fdb]

This is not exactly a pithy sentence. It might help a bit if you said "......those least capable of productioin...."

 

[susanna76]

I see. Thank you both!!