comma with 'though' [adverb]: I was hitting on him though, ‘cause

[sparkly_spike]

I do creative writing (fiction) with a couple of Americans and, being British myself, things get a bit confused with the way things like commas and punctuation should be. The characters are American, so any advice you guys can give me is brilliant.

Original version:

"He may have thought I was hitting on him though, ‘cause he blushed...”

Should it be:

"He may have thought I was hitting on him, though ‘cause he blushed...”

or, "He may have thought I was hitting on him though ‘cause he blushed...”

or, "He may have thought I was hitting on him, though, ‘cause he blushed...”

Another:
"You matter to me too...you’re everything to me."

Should that be, "You matter to me, too...you’re everything to me."

I'll probably update this thread as and when I run into things like this! Thank you in advance
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[Beryl from Northallerton]

Hello sparkly_spike, and Welcome to the Forum!

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[sparkly_spike]

Hello sparkly_spike, and Welcome to the Forum!

By way of a small cautionary note I'll just say that we try to focus on one question per thread. If you feel the need to post further questions, please do so in a separate thread.
Also, I've renamed this thread. Enjoy the forum.

Thank you, sorry, I'm wary of spamming forums because I have so many questions! Thanks for your help

 

[Einstein]

I'd accept
"He may have thought I was hitting on him though, ‘cause he blushed...”

but probably
"He may have thought I was hitting on him, though, ‘cause he blushed...”

is better.

By the way, the rules of punctuation (if they really are different) don't depend on the nationality of the characters but on where the book is to be published and read.

 

[sparkly_spike]

Thank you Einstein, I worry about overusing commas.

How about:

"You matter to me too...you’re everything to me."

Should that be, "You matter to me, too...you’re everything to me." ?

 

[JulianStuart]

Comma use and placement are often a question of style and preference (although not always!)
The forum has some useful resources in the stickies at the top.
This one has a selection of links to punctuation guides - usually the publishers will recommend or require adherence to a particular guide. All that being said, there is still individual freedom in some cases and there are definitiely camps of comma overusers and comma haters