confirmation of (the?) deposit

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Pax Commoditatis

Senior Member
Argentina, español/spanish
Dear Mary:
I received the confirmation of the deposit for the 22nd of this month, referring to the payment of pending invoices. However, I would like to request that you look into the possibility of advancing this to the first days of next week.
I am hoping for a favorable response on your part.
Sincerely,
PAX



PLEASE correct/suggest me if you find any mistakes!

Thanks!

PAX
 
  • nzseries1

    Senior Member
    New Zealand - English
    With regards to "confirmation of the deposit", you should leave "the" in, because it refers to a particular deposit, not deposits in general.

    One thing I would do is remove this entire sentence: I am hoping for a favorable response on your part. You don't need this sentence - it goes without saying. Would you find it conceivable that you were hoping Mary would say no?
     
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