...especially the girls with 80%.

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erroranalysis

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German
One of my students wrote:

[Most of my classmates] think that exploring new places is essential for a nice vacation. [In general, my classmates] want to break free from everyday life by travelling, especially the girls with 80%.

Is the highlighted part acceptable or would you prefer a rewrite? Maybe: 80% of the girls feel that way.
 
  • vicky#15

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    Spanish - Uruguay
    especially the girls with 80% of what? Sorry, it sounds unclear to me... I think that 80% of the girls feel that way sounds better.
     
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