Hi,
Her essay is good but kind of short. It'll be more complete if she expands the number of words at the end of the second paragraph.
I made these sentences. I'm not sure if the underlined part works and sounds natural.
Another expression I think of:
...if she increases some words at the end of the second paragraph.
Thank you so much.
Her essay is good but kind of short. It'll be more complete if she expands the number of words at the end of the second paragraph.
I made these sentences. I'm not sure if the underlined part works and sounds natural.
Another expression I think of:
...if she increases some words at the end of the second paragraph.
Thank you so much.