..expands the number of words...

lokasseyve

Senior Member
Mandarin
Hi,
Her essay is good but kind of short. It'll be more complete if she expands the number of words at the end of the second paragraph.

I made these sentences. I'm not sure if the underlined part works and sounds natural.
Another expression I think of:
...if she increases some words at the end of the second paragraph.

Thank you so much.
 
  • dojibear

    Senior Member
    English - Northeast US
    To me you cannot "expand a number" or "increase words". I would swap those: both of these are common:

    increase the number of words in the second paragraph (not "at the end of")
    expand the second paragraph

    or use the #2 suggestion:

    make the second paragraph longer
     
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