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Parergon

Senior Member
Italiano, Italia
Are the bold parts correct? In particular: can I say "more on" or should I just say focus on?
Also, could I say re-oriented instead of shifted?

The interest in how actors are engaged in various domains of exchange has shifted the analytical focus more on the nature of the relationships than actors’ attributes.
 
  • Prairiefire

    Senior Member
    US (Midwest) - English
    Yes, you could say re-oriented, but I don't see that it would improve anything. "Shift" is a good, punchy word.

    I might write, "...shifted the analytical focus more to the nature of the relationships than the actors' attributes."

    or
    "...focused the analysis more on the nature of the relationships..."
     

    Prairiefire

    Senior Member
    US (Midwest) - English
    I forgot to say why I would do that.

    "Focus on" is correct, but would be used more when the focus was steady, not shifting. There is no movement or change suggested with 'on.'

    Your key action in that sentence is the shift of the focus, so I would use 'to.'

    Personally, I like from...to constructions, so I might write:

    The interest in how actors are engaged in various domains of exchange has shifted the analytical focus away from the actors’ attributes to the nature of their relationships.
     
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