Fox hunting has gradually shifts its fun factor from fox killing to fox chasing.

flowersophy

Senior Member
Chinese-China
Hi,

A: People's fun in fox hunting has gradually shifted from fox killing to fox chasing.
B: Fox hunting has gradually shifts its fun factor from fox killing to fox chasing.

Sentence A is written by my friend and B is written by me. Which one sounds idiomatic?

Many thanks!
 
  • Copyright

    Senior Member
    American English
    Your friend's. :)

    In A, the accent is on people's fun. In B, it is on the fun factor of fox hunting.

    In B, you would also need "shifted."
     

    Hermione Golightly

    Senior Member
    British English
    I can't see that fox-hunting in itself can have a fun factor, certainly not for the foxes, so I prefer sentence A with the emphasis on the fun that people get when fox-hunting. Sorry if I'm being nit-picky, but that's my first thought on reading sentence B.
     
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    manfy

    Senior Member
    German - Austria
    Sorry if I'm being nit-picky but that's my first thought on reading sentence B.
    Not at all nit-picky! Something bugged me too, but I couldn't put my finger on it. Now I realized, it's "shifts its fun factor"; how can an activity shift its fun factor? It sounds odd. When you turn it around it sounds good again:

    C: The fun factor in fox hunting has gradually shifted from fox killing to fox chasing.
     

    flowersophy

    Senior Member
    Chinese-China
    Not at all nit-picky! Something bugged me too, but I couldn't put my finger on it. Now I realized, it's "shifts its fun factor"; how can an activity shift its fun factor? It sounds odd. When you turn it around it sounds good again:

    C: The fun factor in fox hunting has gradually shifted from fox killing to fox chasing.
    I think your version is better. Thank you for your kind help, manfy!:thumbsup:
     
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