He denied he <molested> the girl, then later said he only <lay> on top of her

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JJXR

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Hello to all,

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Sample sentences:

1. The lawyer said Jamar Jr. had at first denied he molested the girl, then later said he only lay on top of her but they had their clothes on.

2. The lawyer said Jamar Jr. had at first denied he had molested the girl, then later said he only lay on top of her but they had their clothes on.

3. The lawyer said Jamar Jr. had at first denied he had molested the girl, then later said he had only lain on top of her but they had their clothes on.

Question:

Sentence #1 is the original. My questions:

(1) Who does the blue part "then later said" refer to, who said the lawyer or Jamar Jr.?

(2) The red parts "molesting the girl" and "lying on top of her" are furthest in the past. Why aren't they in the past perfect in sentence #1?

(3) Do the bolded tenses work in sentences #2 and #3?


Thanks a lot for any comments, corrections or suggestions!

Regards,
JJXR
 
  • VicNicSor

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    Russian
    (1) Jamar Jr.

    (2) Because it's clear the actions in red happened before Jamar's statements in court.

    (3) They don't improve the original and make it more complicated and wordy.
     
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