heavenly shore, "a" heavenly shore or heavenly shores ?

lyricsboy

Member
Français
Hi,:)

I'm working on song lyrics.
It's about a depressed guy wandering in the streets. He stops by a TV store where he sees the same images on every screen.
It goes like this :

As I get by the TV store
Trying to keep a stiff upper lip

Every screen shows heavenly shore
And a surfer's impossible flip

...


So does one of the following sentences sound right to your english native speaker's ear ?:confused:
Every screen shows heavenly shore
Every screen shows "a" heavenly shore
On every screen, "a" heavenly shore
On every screen, the same heavenly shore

Thanks.
 
  • owlman5

    Senior Member
    English-US
    Versions 2,3, and 4 all work well. Number one would have to read either "a heavenly shore" or "heavenly shores".
     

    Hermione Golightly

    Senior Member
    British English
    I agree with the Wise One. Your choice also depends on the rhythm of the music. In speech, my preference is for Every screen shows "a" heavenly shore.

    Hermione
     
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