I couldn't even remember what it had looked like when I had passed it.

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fofonoodles

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Serbian - Serbia
This is from an American video game called "Max Payne". The story is told by the main character as you go and it's narrated.

"Collecting evidence had gotten old a few hundred bullets back. I was already so far past the point of no return I couldn't even remember what it had looked like when I had passed it."

Wouldn't it be better to use the past simple after "when"? What's the difference?

Also, since we have "when" would it be correct to simply say "what it looked like when I passed it"? Thank you.
 
  • Edinburgher

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    German/English bilingual
    I think the double past perfect is unnecessary, and I like your version (past perfect plus simple past) better than both the original and the double simple past. The past perfect is justified because his passing of the point of no return lies in an earlier time frame than the one he is talking about in simple past.
     
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