improve the expression

Discussion in 'English Only' started by gkmgkmgkm, Jan 26, 2017.

  1. gkmgkmgkm

    gkmgkmgkm New Member

    Mandarin
    Could anyone help me improve the following sentences please. I feel them somehow awkward...

    "I am simply fascinated by concrete. As a part-time artist I even take concrete architecture as one of my main themes of drawing. "

    Thank you.
     
  2. Franco-filly Senior Member

    Southern England
    English - Southern England
    I see nothing wrong with your sentences. I might just change the latter slightly and say "As a part-time artist I even use concrete architecture as one of the main themes for my drawings."
     

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