in piecemeal fashion rather than in comprehensive fashion

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JBPARK

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The problems were addressed in piecemeal fashion rather than in comprehensive fashion.

Dear Veterans,

Regarding the above sentence I composed, I can't get past the feeling that there is something awfully redundant about the repetitive use of "in+adjective+fashion" in the sentence. (I was thinking how it would sound if I changed "in comprehensive fashion" to "comprehensively" to avoid the repetition, but that doesn't sound natural either.) I would greatly appreciate it if any of our veterans could comment on whether the repetition of such construction is acceptable as it is, or whether it's rather awkward and requires a rewrite.

Thanks!
 
  • eyeofhorus

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    English - Ireland
    Consider: The problems were addressed one by one, rather than with a comprehensive solution.
     

    eyeofhorus

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    English - Ireland
    "Perfection is achieved, not when there is nothing more to add, but when there is nothing left to take away." Antoine de Saint-Exupery.

    Avoid repetition wherever possible.
     
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