Include your name

[Parergon]

Which one do you think works better? Also is "include" the proper verb?

Finally, I was wondering, had I to provide any references, could I include yours? Or could I include you? Or could I include your name?

 

[Thomas Tompion]

Which one do you think works better? Also is "include" the proper verb?

Finally, I was wondering, had I to provide any references, could I include yours? Or could I include you? Or could I include your name?

There's a tense muddle here too, Parergon, to my ear.

I'd say:

If I have to provide references, can I mention you?

 

[anothersmith]

I think "can I include your name?" sounds clear and respectful. I might also say "can I give them your name?"

 

[Lexiphile]

But you really should say "may" not "can." You are asking for permission, and "may I" is the correct form. "Can I" is used informally, but this text doesn't sound as though it's meant to be informal.

 

[anothersmith]

Good point. Lexiphile's right.