invincible, bets, giving up on, worst level etc

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Dr.Appalayya

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The lion thinks he is all-powerful, sovereign and hence invincible. But, a wasp challenges the lion's mindset and bets it can defeat him by its tactics. To give life to its challenge, the wasp revloves around the lion's snoot as fast as a fan and stings it many times. The lion tries to catch the wasp but in vain. The lion was overpowered at last. Finally giving up on wasp, the lion hides in its cave, shutting itself out from the victorious wasp. The wasp- heady with victory-thinks it is invincible- the proof of which its triumph over the lion, the King and All Powerful. It parties and got drunk to the worst level. While flying back home from the party location, it got into the web of jungle spider: to get caught , entangled and annihilated finally. Nobody on this earth is invincible; everybody is vulnerable to somebody.
Can you please give some tweaks to make above narration right in language?
 
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