John <behind the desk moving rapidly / moving rapidly behind the desk>

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navi

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armenian
Are these sentences correct:

1-John behind the desk moving rapidly attracted her attention.
2-She noticed John behind the desk moving rapidly.

3-His hand on my shoulder pressing softly woke me up.
4-I was awakened by his hand on my shoulder pressing softly.


I think they would be better as "moving rapidly behind the desk" and "pressing softly on my shoulder".
 
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  • eni8ma

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    English - Australia
    Are these sentences correct:

    1-John behind the desk moving rapidly attracted her attention. :cross:
    2-She noticed John behind the desk moving rapidly. :cross:

    3-His hand on my shoulder pressing softly woke me up. :cross:
    4-I was awakened by his hand on my shoulder pressing softly. :cross:


    I think they would be better as "moving rapidly behind the desk" :tick: and "pressing softly on my shoulder" :tick:.
     
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