lump in the throat, unfettered

Dr.Appalayya

Dr.Appalayya

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Hyderabad, India
India;Telugu
Mr Y is a lump in the throat of Mr.X, since Y is an obstruction for the rampant and unfettered misuse of power for personal ends of the former. In this background, one has to understand that the act of sacking Y by X is a product of apprehensions about personal inconvenience rather than a step towards streamlining of administration.

Are the phrases in red letter appropriate to the context?
 
    • coiffe said:
    thorn in the side, or pain in the ass, not lump in the throat

    unfettered is fine
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    I would go with "thorn in the side", given that this seems to be a business-related.:)

    I do have the following concerns about the original sentence:

    Mr Y is a lump in the throat of Mr.X, since Y is an obstruction for the rampant and unfettered misuse of power for personal ends of the former (use of "the former" is confusing in the way this sentence is structured). In this background, one has to understand that the act of sacking Y by X is a product of apprehensions about personal inconvenience rather than a step towards the streamlining of administration (or ...towards streamlining of the administration")
     
    Nobody seems to addressed the unfettered. I'd certainly cut it, because I don't think it adds anything - the image of misuse in fetters isn't very telling, and lots of adjectives blind the reader and send him to sleep. I agree with Dimcl that the sentence needs turning round. What's the matter with something like: Y's sacking of X will look like an act of personal spite, rather than an attempt to improve the efficiency of the organization.
     
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