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Sextus

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Spanish
"There is another crucial text, probably the most important, that should remove all appearance of dogmatism from the exposition, made in PH i and iii, of the Skeptic’s quest for, and attainment of, ataraxia."

Is it ok to say "the exposition, made..." or should I rather use a different verb?

Thanks,

Sextus
 
  • panjandrum

    Lapsed Moderator
    English-Ireland (top end)
    Sextus said:
    "There is another crucial text, probably the most important, that should remove all appearance of dogmatism from the exposition, made in PH i and iii, of the Skeptic’s quest for, and attainment of, ataraxia."
    I think it is perfectly OK without made, or any substitute. I might also want to delete the two red commas.
    Please take into account that I don't understand the subject matter of the sentence:)
     

    DAH

    Senior Member
    USA/California--English
    Sextus said:
    "There is another crucial text, probably the most important, that should remove all appearance of dogmatism from the exposition, cited in PH i and iii, of the Skeptic’s quest for,:cross: and attainment of,:cross: ataraxia."
    my input/suggestions.
     
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