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Young-eun Kim

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Korean - S.Korea
Topic: Not only can good behavior spread through the group, but bad behavior can also be more powerfully modeled.

Hi.
The sentence above seems to make sense to you?
Thanks in advance:)
 
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    American English
    It's odd for me. You begin with understandable English and then seem to lapse into jargon. Depends on your audience, of course.
     

    Young-eun Kim

    Member
    Korean - S.Korea
    It's odd for me. You begin with understandable English and then seem to lapse into jargon. Depends on your audience, of course.
    Hi!
    Good to seeing you agian.
    I made up that sentence for preparing a simple essay on pressure of a peer group.
    The verb "modeled" seems a jargon?
     

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    Jargon or simply intelligible (to me). :)

    Do you mean something like this: Not only can good behavior spread through a group, but bad behavior can spread even faster.

    Even if not, I think you need something that parallels your opening clause in clarity.
     
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