obesity-related health problems

Kacy.H

Senior Member
Chinese
Hello, people. Is the bold necessary? Should I remove it? Thanks1

Overweight people are likely to develop obesity-related health problems, such as diabetes and heart disease, later in life,
 
  • Keith Bradford

    Senior Member
    English (Midlands UK)
    You're right to think that it's a bit superfluous. Perhaps you might say: "Overweight people are particularly likely to develop health problems such as..." or "Overweight people are prone to health problems such as..." In any event, delete the comma after problems and the cause-and-effect link will be maintained.
     
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