Hello,
Trying to write some short stories I was confused about the order of modifier. I have written two sentences:
FIRST SENTENCE
My version :
1 - A random guy, walking along an abandoned old railway, is ending his conversation on the phone.
The correct version should be :
1.2- A random guy, walking along an old abandoned railway, is ending his conversation on the phone.
SECOND SENTENCE
My version :
2- Even before hanging up, the man is called out by a little strange woman wearing warm-colored glasses that barely show her eyes, stands still in front of the railway.
The correct version should be :
2.1- Even before hanging up, the man is called out by a strange little woman wearing warm-colored glasses that barely show her eyes, stands still in front of the railway.
About the correct versions, I made them based on this table :
Thank you!
Trying to write some short stories I was confused about the order of modifier. I have written two sentences:
FIRST SENTENCE
My version :
1 - A random guy, walking along an abandoned old railway, is ending his conversation on the phone.
The correct version should be :
1.2- A random guy, walking along an old abandoned railway, is ending his conversation on the phone.
SECOND SENTENCE
My version :
2- Even before hanging up, the man is called out by a little strange woman wearing warm-colored glasses that barely show her eyes, stands still in front of the railway.
The correct version should be :
2.1- Even before hanging up, the man is called out by a strange little woman wearing warm-colored glasses that barely show her eyes, stands still in front of the railway.
About the correct versions, I made them based on this table :
Thank you!