our strong tower for all time, our refuge

[heather 1997]

Hi friends, please help me with the following question.
My classmate wrote a sentence:The Lord Jesus is our support for eternity, He is our strong tower for all time, our refuge.
I change it to be:The Lord Jesus is our support for eternity, He is our strong tower, our refuge for all time.
Q: Do you think which version is better or more reasonable?
Thank you beforehand.

 

[owlman5]

I prefer the rhythm of the words in your version, Heather. Both versions seem equally reasonable to me.

 

[natkretep]

I prefer your version too. You have two clauses that express the same meaning. If there is no conjunction (like and), I would normally use a stronger punctuation mark than a comma between them - perhaps a comma or a full stop. (You can also use a colon, but that would look old fashioned.)

The Lord Jesus is our support for eternity; He is our strong tower, our refuge for all time.

 

[heather 1997]

thank all of you so much!