Que pensais de esto?

[Jade]

Que tal esto?

gracias

Geno

His last offer including all furniture, except a PC desk and chair as well as all personal belongings. In my opinion this is an exceptional offer.

 

[el_novato]

For me, the expression is good. Only a few changes. But, wait for the experts.

Geno:

His last offer, including all furniture, except the desktop PC and the chair as well as all personal belongings,in my opinion this/it is an exceptional offer.

Nota 1:
Desktop computer = desktop PC.

Nota 2:
Quité el punto en "personal belongings. In my opinion", y puse una coma, para darle el sentido de continuidad.

Nota 3:
¿Es Geno o Geño?. En México usamos Geño, pero no recuerdo para qué nombre.

Nota 4:
¿Estás aconsejando a Geno o le estás vendiendo (o haciéndole ver que es una BUENA oferta?
Pienso que usar it o this "in my opinion this is an exceptional offer." puede cambiar un poco el peso de la frase. Solo es una idea mía. Si no lo estás vendiendo o tratando de que aproveche la oferta, usaría "it"

 

[gddrew]

His last offer included all furniture (except a PC desk and chair) as well as all personal belongings. In my opinion this is an exceptional offer.

 

[Sandra]

His last offer included all furniture (except a PC desk and chair) as well as all personal belongings. In my opinion this is an exceptional offer.

I think gddrew's sentence is very good, but be careful, I am not sure it is the same thing you want to say, my guess is that the offer DO NOT include the:
-PC desk and chair.
-Personal belongings.

And the way I read gddrew sentece says you DO include Personal Belongings.

If this is not what you want, and Personal Belongings aren't included, I will suggest:

His last offer included all the furniture (except from a PC desk, chair and personal belongings). In my opinion this is an exceptional offer.

 

[Vicki]

I think gddrew's sentence is very good, but be careful, I am not sure it is the same thing you want to say, my guess is that the offer DO NOT include the:
-PC desk and chair.
-Personal belongings.

And the way I read gddrew sentece says you DO include Personal Belongings.

If this is not what you want, and Personal Belongings aren't included, I will suggest:

His last offer included all the furniture (except from a PC desk, chair and personal belongings). In my opinion this is an exceptional offer.

I agree. "Personal belongings" are undoubtedly part of what's not included. "Computer desk" sounds a little better than PC desk, although the latter is OK. (Sandra, just a note: "except for" instead of "except from".) So:

His last offer included all the furniture (except for a computer desk, chair and personal belongings). In my opinion this is an exceptional offer.

Saludos.
Vicki

 

[gddrew]

I wasn't sure, either. This illustrates precisely why sentences must be well-formed: to avoid ambiguity.

Saludos,
Greg

 

[lauranazario]

His last offer including all furniture, except a PC desk and chair as well as all personal belongings. In my opinion this is an exceptional offer.

My suggestion:
His/her last offer included all the furniture, except a PC desk, a chair and all his/her personal belongings. In my opinion, this is an exceptional offer!