recommended/ made a recommendation

kva

Senior Member
USA
Russian
Hello everyone!

I am trying to decide which sentence to choose for the resume as a bullet point. I like option B better. Does it seem ok or I should modify it somehow?

A. Recommended that the MSA level analysis of the housing market should form the cornerstone of loss projections in home mortgage portfolios.

B. Made a recommendation of using the MSA level analysis of the housing market for loss projections in home mortgage portfolios.

Thanks you for your help!
 
  • bibliolept

    Senior Member
    AE, Español
    I prefer the first one because it is simpler. Perhaps:

    Recommended the/an/a MSA-level analysis of the housing market as the cornerstone of loss projections in home mortgage portfolios.
     

    kitenok

    Senior Member
    Привет kva!
    Note that, if you choose option B, "Made a recommendation to use..." is a somewhat more common formula.

    I support bibliolept's suggestion of a hyphen for the adjective "MSA-level."

    Желаю успеха!
     

    kva

    Senior Member
    USA
    Russian
    Thanks bibliolept! I like your suggestion, it is much simpler :))

    My understanding is that I should use "the" since I have already mentioned a MSA-level analysis in the previous sentence. Is that correct?
     
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