Sentence Clarity--forming the best sentence

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EnglishABC

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NZ English
a. The burn was utterly unbearable for between ten and fifteen minutes, to the point where/that I couldn't stop shaking and needed to take off my clothes, which revealed some severe, hideous, and third-degree burns.

b. The burn was so utterly unbearable for between ten and fifteen minutes, that I couldn't stop shaking and needed to take off my clothes, which revealed some severe, hideous, and third-degree burns.

c. The burn was utterly unbearable for between ten and fifteen minutes, to the point where/that I couldn't stop shaking and needed to take off my clothes, revealing some severe, hideous, and third-degree burns.

d. The burn was utterly unbearable for between ten and fifteen minutes, to the point where/that I couldn't stop shaking and needed to take off my clothes, only to reveal some severe, hideous, and third-degree burns.

Do you think all are grammatical?
Using all variables, how would you write this sentence?

Have a great day
 
  • WyomingSue

    Senior Member
    English--USA
    Well, my first reaction was that it is very tiresome to read such a long sentence. I would break it up into two: "The burn was utterly ... minutes. I couldn't ..., revealing/only to reveal ...."
     

    EnglishABC

    Senior Member
    NZ English
    Thanks to you both.

    The sentence is lengthy, but as I think owlman5 will agree the connectors make it flow clearly enough. Maybe splitting it up is a good idea though!
     
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