stood on his tummy staring at him

[theol]

a sparrow stood on his tummy staring at him and peck at his hand.


Is "staring at him" correct?

 

[heypresto]

Yes, but the sentence has other errors.

 

[theol]

Yes, but the sentence has other errors.

would you mind telling me the mistake I made?

 

[Chasint]

Because you used "staring" you should also use "pecking".

"A sparrow stood on his tummy staring at him and pecking at his hand."

If it only pecked once, then you could say:

"A sparrow stood on his tummy staring at him. It pecked at his hand."

 

[Kimaunz]

A sparrow lay on its tummy staring at him and pecked his hand.

 

[Chasint]

A sparrow lay on its tummy staring at him and pecked his hand.

The sparrow was on his tummy, not its own tummy

 

[Kimaunz]

Okay. Thanks. Then "A sparrow stood on his tummy and pecked his hand." would be okay too.

How does the following sentence sound?:
A sparrow lay on his tummy and pecked his hand.

 

[heypresto]

"A sparrow stood on his tummy and pecked his hand." would be okay too.

Yes.

How does the following sentence sound?:
A sparrow lay on his tummy and pecked his hand.

I don't think sparrows can lie down.

 

[Kimaunz]

Ha, ha. Thanks, heypresto.