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Hatgray

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India
"It was a very gloomy day. He was running to catch the train. At that point, I am sad. I do not know where I was and what was happening."


Can I shift from past to present when telling a story? People tend to do this always.


My purpose is to heighten the reader/listener's emotions. I think it is okay.

Thanks.
 
  • Copyright

    Senior Member
    American English
    If you want to do that for some reason, you have to go all the way:

    It was a very gloomy day. He was running to catch the train. At that point, I am sad. I do not know where I am and what is happening.
     

    Hatgray

    Senior Member
    India
    If you want to do that for some reason, you have to go all the way:

    It was a very gloomy day. He was running to catch the train. At that point, I am sad. I do not know where I am and what is happening.
    Would it be a glaring mistake to keep it as it is?
     

    Hermione Golightly

    Senior Member
    British English
    People often use the dramatic present when telling stories but in writing it isn't easy to handle. Every mistake glares from the page. Of course we only have a short extract, no context, and it's impossible to relate the two sentences to each other. To make another observation, 'at that point' should be 'at this point'.
    My advice is not to use this device until you can do it with complete assurance.
     
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