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palabra86

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Spanish
Is it ok to write it thay way? I omit the word (report?) but now, (a report) about dozens...?

Is it correct to add "who" after "hackers"?

Is it correct to add a before prize?

But now, about dozens of hackers who met last week at the College of Management and they tried to penetrate the cyber defense system and had in front of their eyes, a prize of 100,000$ for those who would succeed.
 
  • Chez

    Senior Member
    English English
    It's possible, but doesn't sound entirely natural (unless it's following on from several other stories, perhaps).

    And why do you use 'But' at the start of the sentence? It sounds as if you are changing the subject or talking about something very different from what went before.

    I would say:

    And now, a story about...

    'who' is correct

    And now, a story about dozens of hackers who met last week at the College of Management and tried to penetrate the cyber defense system, with a prize of $100,000 on offer for the person/one who succeeded.
     
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