Sweet as a tangerine and equally tender

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expectnomercy

Senior Member
Ukrainian
Hi,

I came up with a sentence but it sounds kind of awkward to me, especially the part in bold:

Sweet as a tangerine and equally tender, it won't leave your taste buds indifferent.

Does it make sense to you?

Thanks! :)
 
  • lingobingo

    Senior Member
    English - England
    The part in bold is fine — just as tender/equally tender. (I’m not so sure about indifferent taste buds, though. ;))
     

    expectnomercy

    Senior Member
    Ukrainian
    lingobingo

    Thank you :) What about the "leave your taste buds indifferent" part? Do you think it should be paraphrased?
     

    lingobingo

    Senior Member
    English - England
    Not necessarily. It’s creative! But it might make the reader do a double take, trying to work out what it means. If you want to discuss it further, it needs its own thread.
     
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