swell into a cloud

  • Autumn_in_Norenskaia

    Senior Member
    France, French
    The entire sentence would be:


    "Through the window, I sent out in the night that entire stench that had gushed here through the splits around the thin double door of the room and then had swollen into a cloud of choking sepulchral stench."
     

    Autumn_in_Norenskaia

    Senior Member
    France, French
    Oops and the explanation of what I mean:

    I'm trying to find a could image, to show that the bad smell is more and more prensent, like a river that swells.
     

    panjandrum

    Occasional Moderator
    English-Ireland (top end)
    In your context, "swell into a cloud" sounds perfect.
    Could you find a way to avoid using the word "stench" twice in the sentence?
     
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