I wrote this sentence. Just it came out of blue and I wrote it. I personified Clock, Dawn etc. Here goes my sentence:
For those who yell at the Clock for sounding Alerm at the hours when Dawn breaks, start blaming our own intelligence who dared to measure the movement of what we all are on.
Does the bold part sounds natural? If not, what changes do I have to make?
For those who yell at the Clock for sounding Alerm at the hours when Dawn breaks, start blaming our own intelligence who dared to measure the movement of what we all are on.
Does the bold part sounds natural? If not, what changes do I have to make?