to raise educated and motivated students

Simin93

Senior Member
Persian-Iran
Hi there
Could you please correct me? The following sentence is self-made.

The university's primary goal is to raise well-educated and well-motivated students.

Many Thanks:)
 
  • Simin93

    Senior Member
    Persian-Iran
    I am so sorry. I just want to know what I wrote makes sense to you? I am not sure that I can use "raise" here?
     

    Hermione Golightly

    Senior Member
    British English
    Thank you for providing that important information.
    The grammar seems fine except perhaps use of the definite article for university. I do have a problem with the definition of what the function of a university is.
     

    Cagey

    post mod (English Only / Latin)
    English - US
    I am so sorry. I just want to know what I wrote makes sense to you? I am not sure that I can use "raise" here?
    I would use 'produce' instead of 'raise'.
    As e2efour says, 'raise' is associated with what parents do. It involves all kinds of care and teaching, such as tending to their children's health, teaching manners and values, instilling the habits that will be useful in adult life, and so on.
    'Produce' can refer specifically to accomplishing the goals associated with a university education, which are primarily educational but which may also include values and habits related to good citizenship, for instance.
     
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